Great story. Sorry your having trouble finding a beta. I'd offer but I'm horrible at grammar and spelling I usually have to have my mother look over my writing as she is a great speller and pretty good at grammar. I hope to see more in the future so good luck at finding a beta. ~ZLB

Go to any of the spuffy websites like Bloodshedverse or Elysian Fields if you can't find a beta here. So Spike and Buffy are Dawn's parents? *claps* I love those stories with them as her parents. Loved Spikes POV, the best, so far. Can't wait to read Buffy's and see if she knows, that Spike's been watching her, for a while now. A lot of POV's to cover. Really enjoying your fic, thanks.

Oh an update :) Long time no read.
Riley is just to normal for this Buffy but he doesn't understand it.
Oh when Buffy felt the tinglies I guess she had a silent watcher this evening. ~ At last she confess later she was watching him too; she couldn't indeed hold that against him :)
Hopefully soon more.

OH that was good, never heard of a doctor proscribing that, oh wait I have but it was to do with inducing labour.

Wonder what Spike thought of GIles revalation in the store about Buffy.

OH that was interesting, so is Buffy with Spike now or is he just visiting.

I'm not English so I'm not of use as a beta. I can only point you out to some links. Or ask on the tag board... I hope you'll find one because I'm looking forward to more. ~
I'm glad Riley is out now :)
Buffy has a lot of toys. If she only knew that Spike is looking forward to play with them too. ;-)
Loved the update

You updated? :-D
Oh and the spacing looks good.
What Giles said about the Slayers wanting kinky sex being submissive sounds logical.
And Spike was very insightful why Buffy has problems to knowledge that she loved someone, especially Spike.
But him saving Joyce changed things for Buffy I guess. Or simply gave her the courage to speak. ~ Till next chapter!

Great story with a unique plot and much easier to read this time. Look foward to more

I liked your story alot but i did have trouble reading it but i think that this has a lot of poetential and i think once you find a beta to help you out i think that will make the story even better. i'm not trying to be mean or anything in fact from what i read i really liked it alot.

I can't read this as written. You really need to break this down into paragraphs that can be easily read. For one thing. You have to make a new paragraph after each person speaks, otherwise you get a jumbled up mess that no one can read.

Please edit this and I would be happy to read.

I'm not trying to flame you, I just can't read it.

Great start. Looking forward to reading more.

This is a good start, a little hard to read because of the no spacing between paragraphs but a good fic.

That's a really mean way to make what could be a helpful suggesstion. I am sure the writer takes the writing very seriosuly. Maybe it was a site or a simple coding error. Or maybe the person is not familiar with how to post fics, etc. If you can't find a nicer way to say things then I think you should take your words elswhere. I read the chapter and the premise and idea was wonderful. My advice to the writer, which is what I believe you were trying to give... would be to seek a beta. I used to write fic, and they are valuable assets to any great story. I think this one has the potential to be something wonderful, and having a second pair of eyes is always helpful. If you aren't familiar with how to post and coding, etc, maybe ask a veteran from this site for help. I look forward to seeing more of this fic in the future!