Date: 11/08/2007 - 11:21 pm Title: Little Girl Lost...
OH that was good, I wonder what he will say when he finds out they are all alone.
Author's Response: thank you... I'm sure he'll be understanding
Date: 10/04/2007 - 02:46 am Title: Little Girl Lost...
OH great I like this so far ,yu write very well,very well so far.
Author's Response: Wow! thanks so much. I'm happy you're enjoying it!
Date: 10/04/2007 - 12:06 am Title: Little Girl Lost...
lovely au.
Author's Response: thank you so much!
Date: 10/03/2007 - 10:43 pm Title: Little Girl Lost...
Oooh, what a lovely beginning, darling! I'm loving the interaction between the sisters and Spike. It's truly a delightful read and I'm very looking forward to the second part of this chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you :) I'm so excited you like it! I'll definately try to post part two tonight.
Date: 10/03/2007 - 04:53 pm Title: Little Girl Lost...
Just a tip: The spacing like you did on your LJ looks better ( = makes it better to read, the dialog I mean) or simply more spacing between the dialog.
~ What a nightmare... not only doing the last minute Christmas shopping, Dawn wondering off. Almost impossible to find her.
Dawn can be lucky that Spike found her first, working for the security.
Love the start and looking forward to more :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your comment on my LJ too, it's all still too new for me. Totally appreciate it.
I know, Christmas shopping is terrible at the best of times, but when kids decide to wander...
Date: 10/03/2007 - 04:24 pm Title: Little Girl Lost...
Great start! I look forward to reading more. :D
Author's Response: thank you, I'll try to update it again tonight :)
Date: 10/03/2007 - 04:17 pm Title: Little Girl Lost...
I loved the beginning of this story, I can't wait to see what happens next! Great start!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: 10/03/2007 - 03:55 pm Title: Little Girl Lost...
i actually would have wanted to read this, but i can't with it written like this. you really need to space it out more, i would suggest getting a beta to help you out.
Author's Response: I know, thanks for telling me, I posted the chapter so late at night that I didn't even do a proper read through, I promise the next chapter will be easier to read. I also post them on my live journal which is generally easier for me to do layout with
Date: 10/03/2007 - 03:22 pm Title: Little Girl Lost...
Really like it so far. Keep going.
Author's Response: thanks!
Date: 10/03/2007 - 01:36 pm Title: Little Girl Lost...
I like it. I can´t wait to see more.
Spike is very sweet with Dawn. ^^
Author's Response: yeah he is really sweet with Dawn, and she's still a little devil.
Date: 10/03/2007 - 01:14 pm Title: Little Girl Lost...
wonderful start, looking forward to more
Author's Response: thank you! I'll post again soon
Date: 10/03/2007 - 01:10 pm Title: Little Girl Lost...
Saved by Spike...
Waiting to see what happens.
Author's Response: thanks, I'll post again soon in a better layout that's easier to read