Find-A-Fic Forum


Chit-Chat

http://pari.cbox.ws/

spikeluver.com


Reviews For
[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 11:14AM: NoneAnonymous
Aww, love it. It's so sweet that Spike is watching/protecting her while she's sleeping. Adorable. *sigh* =)

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 11:13AM: NoneAnonymous
Very nice.

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 11:12AM: NoneAnonymous
it was very sweet, Spike's thoughts were very well written, it sort of paints a picture of a mood and you feel the tranquility and all that fun stuff...it was adorable and captured this sort of transition is a very gentle way...anyways to make a long rambling story short - i liked it alot, give me more ; ) take care

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 11:10AM: NoneAnonymous
I hope all goes well while you're out of town, and thanks for posting before you leave! William interacts so well with Sam, and I know he definitely will be a good teacher. Any guy that sweet to a child deserves a little something, yeah?:)

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 10:24AM: NoneAnonymous
This chapter was beatifully written. *sobs* Not that i'm happy about the outcome, but it was very touching. So tragic.

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 10:21AM: NoneAnonymous
You are unflinching, for which I am grateful. This is rough to read, but it works really well.

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 10:20AM: NoneAnonymous
So Angel is back in heavy brood mode. It was good Buffy didn't see him. He'd only end up trying to gain her sympathy. You really write tragedy well. This death is really drawn out.

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 10:01AM: NoneAnonymous
wunderful story!

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 10:00AM: NoneAnonymous
Excellent little vignette. Loved it!

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 09:39AM: NoneAnonymous
Love the movie but as a rule I am not a fan of fics based on movies because the author's tend to repeat the exact same story just with Buffy characters. Which is why I am totally glad I checked this one out, you're sticking the the original vibe and feel of the movie but through Buffy's internal monologue I can see that you're not afraid to play fast and loose with the cannon. In the movie Alyson seemed to be hesitantly drawn into the Drape lifestyle just because Crybaby made her innocent little heart flutter. (It was Johnny Depp, who can blame her?) But in this story by including the fact she seemed to like Xander and Ahn, apart from Spike it shows that she really wants a different life than the one she has and she's not just rebelling so she can be with the bad boy of her dreams. It makes her a much more powerful character and not just a naive girl looking following her heart because of a cute guy. By deliberately chosing a side or atleast making overtures to the Drapes it makes her more of an equal to the romantic leader of the 'bad element'. So far I'm hooked and I can't wait for the next offering :)

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 09:36AM: NoneAnonymous
Oh my god I luv that move its my favorit johnny Depp move I luv it its so awsom that u made that story I been waiting for someone to do it finially someone sees the light I luv spike the story and Johnny Depp!!!!!!!!

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 09:35AM: NoneAnonymous
definitely loving it so far even though i have never seen the movie although after i get through reading this story i will proably go and rent it

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 09:34AM: NoneAnonymous
Its good, but I dont totally understand, why is spike called crybaby and what is a square? If I watch the movie will I get it? Sorry to be a pain,

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 09:15AM: NoneAnonymous
Loved it! Ii'm glad Mattie can get spike out! hopefully they can get to buffy on time!

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 09:13AM: NoneAnonymous
Oh gosh!! Kamal! So amazingly sweet how he reacted to seeing Mattie again!! Yay! This is wonderful! Fate smiling on people is always fun! I can't wait for you to get back and give us more of this awesome story! Let me know how Austrailia goes! I want to go there some day! =)

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 09:08AM: NoneAnonymous
Oh this was perfect - you left us with hope and brought together Mattie and he love again! Thanks for the GREAT Chapter. Enjoy your holiday in Australia! (Maybe your next tale can be centered there?!!!). Happy Traveling. Be Safe!

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 09:05AM: NoneAnonymous
Wow - and the plot thickens, lol! I somehow managed to miss the last chapter until now, but now that I've read both of them, I must say that you're an incredible author, and that this fic is amazing! I esoecially loved the twist of adding Kamal to the fic - it's so perfect, lol. Have fun in Australia, and I can't wait until you're able to update again! Take care, C ; )

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 09:03AM: NoneAnonymous
Her husband! I didn't see that coming. I know you gave us some background story on what happened and I'm hoping you'll give some more. I'm glad you did leave this chapter on a happier note. I was scared there for a minute. Have fun on your trip and thanks for the update.

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 08:57AM: NoneAnonymous
loved the update

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 08:56AM: NoneAnonymous
This is to Mac Sorry Jolynn but I couldn't contact him directly because he never signs in. Okay, I'm usually a passive person but Mac, your continued assaults on Jolynn are really pissing me off. She didn't attack you in that last chapter so why did you have to come back and be a childish jerk yet again? And yes, I called you a jerk publically. Considering the fact that you basicaly called me inarticualte by saying her reviewers only could respond 'kewl' , I don't feel jerk is out of line. I have a few other choice words but will refrain. She said she would change Amon's status, she gave reasons for not doing a rewrite, damn good reasons, and it's a fanfic. A fanfic. Who cares if she called him a sheik or the damn president of the US. People write fanfics for fun, for the joy of writing and sharing with those who want to read their work. The woman does have a real life. I don't know if your life consists of only reading fanfics but most of us do have other things to do. What is your problem? I mean really? Why don't you just back off? I think this is a wonderfully told tale. It has drama, NOT melodrama, romance, action, good charater developement, beautiful detail, everything. Just shut up okay? Let it go. Why the hell must you harp on it. She already told you she wouldn't respond anymore. If you are trying to discourage loyal readers it doesn't seem to be working so just give it up. You're making yourself look like an ass. Now then, Jolynn, I loved the chapter. Yea Mattie and yea Kamal. What a perfect turn of events.

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 07:46AM: NoneAnonymous
This is a fantastic story. More please.

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 07:43AM: NoneAnonymous
I'll say she'll remember when there is an actual kiss. I loved that bit, her thinking that he kissed her when she was only rememebring when he last had. Ic an feel the promise of secrets and little moments of beauty. I can't wait for more...as for the westerns, nahh, didn't like them, don't think I've ever watched a John Wayne flick, but reading about it is totally different. And anyway *whispers, I loved Little House on the Prairie*

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 07:42AM: NoneAnonymous
My net connection was dead for days, so these last two chapters were very nice to come back to :o)

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 07:39AM: NoneAnonymous
{chuckles and smirks} LIked this chapter. Look forward to the next one. I enjoy the western flavor. I wonder how long it will take before they can corner the Medicine Man for some answers.

[Delete] [Respond]
June 30 2005 - 07:38AM: NoneAnonymous
Hey there! Okay, if it means we get frequent updates I am totally willing to look aside at the little grammar/spelling issues. Although it does take the story out of 'great' class and put it in 'good' class, which is a shame. However, if you do two things I think you can fix a lot of this: First, any place you have to use the word 'been' or 'being' double and triple check your usage there, the compound verb thing is hanging you up. Second: if you or your beta are using spellcheck, double and triple check the actual word you are using to replace the incorrectly spelled word you are trying to correct. There are more correctly spelled wrong words than incorrectly spelled right words, if you understand what I mean. And double check name spelling: Angel became Angle and Luke became Luck a couple times. But you have a real talent for this kind of storytelling so please don't let these things put you off, you're doing fantastic here. I mean it when I say you weave a spell around the scenes you are writing to the point that my visualization of what is happening is greater than most writers are able to accomplish. And frankly, I'm not that easy to please overall, so take this for what it's worth. Wonderful first story - wonderful more than first story. But please don't delay posts, I don't think I could bear it. :-)